What to avoid and how to fix it
This lesson talks you through one way to write your paragraphs: one possible solution is to choose the listing paragraph method. To help you to learn how to write this type of paragraph, you will find below instructions on how to write them, useful vocal to do this and examples of what works and doesn’t work.
A quick reminder about paragraphs
Before I go any further, I’d like to remind you of some of the keys to writing a good paragraph. These are:
1. a paragraph should be organised around one idea
2. the main idea should be clear to the reader: this means boring old topic sentences
3. the idea should be well developed in the paragraph
What is a listing paragraph?
Put simply a listing paragraph is a paragraph containing different ideas that all connect to one main idea. It is perhaps easiest to think of this as the “Firstly” “Secondly” “Thirdly” paragraph. A key to making them work is to make sure that different ideas connect to one central idea. Take a look at this very simple example to see what I mean:
There are at least three different ways to organise a paragraph. The first is to follow a structure where where you make a main point, develop it with an explanation and then illustrate it with an example. The second is to list separate points that connect to the main idea stated in the topic paragraph. The third is the compare and contrast paragraph in which you examine the relationship between two different ideas.
Do you see how the “ideas” contained in the content sentences all link back to the main idea in the topic sentence, highlighted in red?
When you should consider a listing paragraph
The next step is to decide when you should use the listing paragraph structure. Here are some ideas for you to consider:
· you have a series of connected ideas (reasons/examples/explanations etc) that relate to one main idea
· these connected ideas are balanced (equally relevant)
· it makes sense in that essay to give different reasons (ie the essay asks you to write about the reasons why something is the case)
· perhaps it is simpler to list rather than explain in detail (this is particularly the case in exams where you under time pressure)
Getting the topic sentence right
One of the keys to making this listing paragraph structure work is to get the topic sentence right. These are not rules, but think about these general guidelines:
· the topic sentence should come first and be simple: you want the reader to see immediately what your para is about
· it should ideally say that you are going to list different reasons etc. If you don’t do this, the reader may not understand your structure and how the points relate to each other
What to avoid and how to fix it
This type of paragraph can often go wrong. One particular problem is that the list ideas do not relate to the main idea in the topic sentence. Look at this example:
There are a number of reasons why animals should not be kept in captivity. This is wrong because zoos are often unsanitary and the animals suffer unnecessary pain and suffering because they easily become sick and die. In many cases zoos do not have effective breeding programmes and they actually contribute to the decline in numbers of certain endangered species. Moreover, in many countries zoos have become less and less popular because of the influence of natural history programmes on television.
Do you see the problem? The final sentence doesn’t really relate to/balance the other ideas – it is about something else altogether.
I have two suggestions about how to avoid this problem. The first is to consider adding a concluding sentence to the paragraph that summarises the ideas. That should help you to avoid this kind of irrelevance by showing you how one sentence doesn’t relate to the others. The other idea is not to be afraid of using listing language.